Rei has one incomplete, multi-part story in the works. Six well
received parts have been posted so far, but it has been a few months since the last
segment. Rei's writing style literately draws the reader into the complexity of the
character. The story starts with a bang, despite the author's entitling the first segment
as a "Wanton Establishment of Character." Attempted suicide is enough to draw
almost any reader's attention. The trick is holding it.
The reader's interest is held by Rei's talent for dialogue mixed with pithy running
commentary. The dialogue has a realistic feel. The number of 14 year olds who talk as 18
year old preppies as Rei has written Chris is rather limited, I admit. On the other hand,
it is fiction, and fourteen year old chatter, even from introverted misfits, is
distressingly boring. That realism would defeat holding the reader's interest, so make him
incredibly (literally) intelligent; therefore out of place in life. It's been done. Lot's.
But Rei does the "Catcher in the Rye" meets "Porky's" riff extremely
In passing, I have to admit being biased towards writers who know how to use an
ellipsis. That's that funny string of dots that indicate pauses and incomplete sentences
that seem to have disappeared in most computer assisted writings. I also like writing that
does not read as though it has been put through the grade level dumber. Instead of one
twelve word maximum declarative sentence after another, with few words over three
syllables, there are complex sentences, judicious use of the passive voice, and actual
punctuation! Oh, fabulous joy! Well, perhaps a few more simple declarative statements
would focus a tad more attention on the story and away from the author's tour de force.
Some might question the pacing when it takes fifteen thousand words to get through one
day. Let's see, sixty days, oops! That's 900K words and Chris won't even have a full set
of tits! Maybe that should be "Catcher" meets "Gone with the Wind."
Angst, dreams of gentle gods, unexpected heroism, a buddy guide even more pathetic than
the hero(ine), a potential girlfriend to show him? whatever, and a bully villain begging
for a comeuppance makes a lot of material for Rei to work over whenever additional
segments get completed.
Lots of wry (apologies for the pun) humor in Rei's writing makes it a fun, if not
titillating, read. The slowing of posting makes me fear that Rei, like her narrator, may
have gotten lost in the woods. Here's hoping not.