A major attraction to Britney's two stories are the illustrations, somewhat of the
computerized paper doll variety. They do give visual depth to the stories. We must give
Britney creative credit for that effort which amuses.
Britney's story lines have not been classified as "Sweet" but that would be
right on the money. There is no anger, no rejection, and no sex in the stories. Despite
the "Bad Boy to Good Girl" category of "Alex's Life," I've seen more
sibling fighting over who got first crack at the Sunday funny papers. The boys may not be
secretly dressing, but they aren't very resistive either. Even any embarrassment potential
is thinly written and strictly internal. "Making the Band" is incomplete with
only one segment. It's not difficult to see where it could go, and reviewer comments were
quite positive. However with a year's hiatus, I have little hope for more on this one.
The story's logistical premises are of the blatantly author convenience variety, not to
be confused with a "how to" primer. Adults are simply facilitating devices,
neither obstacles nor truly involved in the situation.
Britney's writing style is somewhat more complex than the first blush read would lead
one to believe. Still the writing is so predominately in short declarative sentences that
the read tends to cloy. The writing while short, runs toward the "first this, then
that" organization. Consequently we are told of the characters emotions rather than
There is a difference between the way ninth graders write and the way they talk and
think. Britney has selected the former to portray her central characters. She has a
tendency to put dialogue from multiple characters in the same paragraphs. The writing is
so straightforward that it's not difficult to sort out the speakers, but it is another
sign of an evolving writing capability.
What Britney has submitted elicits an "Isn't that nice?" reaction. If what
you read gets too heavy, if what you need is a simple smile, then Britney's writings will
do, once or twice through.