LADY JANE, one of three stories posted at Crystal's,
leads one down a familiar path until, not without a bit of warning, the path seems to fade
a bit and leaves one wondering, "What did I miss here?" Careful reading will
alleviate this and make you see that the fate planned for the hero is not quite so bad as
the vindictive ex-girlfriend imagined it would be.
"The Sisters Of Athernia" is a continuation and
completion of a work begun by Diane Christy. It IS a long one, with the two posted
parts reaching over 400K, but it is definitely worth the read. Again, we have the
common plotline, 'boys become girls', but with a twist that makes the trip worthwhile.
Well written and virtually error free, as are all of RJ's efforts, the reading goes
faster than one might think it would. There's also a shocking twist ending, but
you'll have to read the story to find out what it is!
"More Of A Challenge" contained more graphic sex than I like. As a matter
of fact, all three of these stories had more explicit sex than _I_ like to read, but who
am I to decide for anyone else, how much is too much? It is a well written tale,
although a bit more predictable than the other two.
All in all, these are three well written and well
thought out tales that I am sure will please any
reader who is willing to take the time to sit and read them. The plotlines were
pretty good and the characterizations were very good. I say that, knowing that two of
my OWN tales are as long. Meticulous proofing has ensured that all
three of these tales are virtually error free, both in usage and spelling, always a plus
and, combined with good plots and believable characterizations, causes me to give RJMcD a
thumbs up on his work so far. I look forward to RJ's next posting. For me, the
sex could be toned down considerably. For you... that's YOUR call as the readers.
Cathy_t_ said that!
The stories of RJMcD are long and they are X-rated. But if you like
forced femme, extreme mind control, wicked femdom, being made to love a man and dont
mind something a little edgy thrown in, then dont let the length or X-rating of
RJs tales keep you away. Unlike many stories with X-ratings, these are thoughtful,
psychologically compelling, and extremely well written. In fact, they are written in such
a clean style and are so well paced that they read like stories half their length.
My favorite of RJs stories is "More of a Challenge." This is the
delightfully wicked tale of two friends, Donny and Eddie, who are kidnapped and taken to
the mysterious hideaway of a rich and powerful man who intends to transform them into
beautiful female sex-slaves. Sure, it is a stock situation in TG-fiction, but its
one that RJ makes fresh with excellent writing, some original touches, and compelling
psychological realism. The boys first lesson in submission comes when they are given
the instruction to masturbate each other. The thoughts racing through their minds as they
try not to get aroused are really erotic. After that its one humiliation after
another: the usual staples of this kind of fantasy (Im not complaining!). You
wont want to miss the penis fountain scene. RJ does a great job of showing the
progression of Donny and Eddie into girls, including their considerable resistance, and it
is the description of this psychological process that really keeps the story both original
For all of the sex found in "Lady Jane," it is once again the psychological
process of boy becomes girl that is the true soul of the tale. John has just broken up
with his girlfriend Heather. The majority of the story is really rather sweet.
Heathers plan is to have John be her slave for two weeks. During that time she will
treat him as a slut in order to humiliate him. But, unexpectedly, Johnnow
Janeactually shows a natural inclination to being a girl, especially when it comes
to giving oral sex to Heathers boyfriend, Bobby. You have to read the descriptions
of oral sex in this story to believe the level of painstaking detail. Its simply
amazing! While there isnt much action outside of the sex, a lot is going on inside
Janes mind, as he discovers that he is falling in love with Bobby in a very romantic
wayand Bobby is falling in love with him. His desire to please and his concern that
Bobby, who knows what Jane has in his panties, will ultimately reject him are extremely
touching. While on the surface seeming nothing more than a raunchy sex romp, this is a
very thoughtful, moving, and realistic story. No hormones, operations, mind
controljust a boy in a dress trying to look pretty and sexy. The real theme of this
story is revealed by the observation that RJ puts into the mouth of Janes lover
Bobby: that being a girl is as much a state of mind as it is a state of body. Bravo, RJ!
Read "Lady Jane." Youll laugh, youll cry, and youll learn some
really neat tricks on giving head!
Finally, there is "The Sisters of Athernia," a two-part conclusion to a story
originally begun by Diane Christy. But you dont have to read the original to follow
RJs contribution. Although Diana and her three friends have already been transformed
into pretty 20-year-old women on this island of engineered boys and girls, there is plenty
of psychological transformation to be done. And this is where RJ excels. In fact, in spite
of the X-rating, there really isnt that much explicit sex in this story. RJ shows
that you dont have to write about sex acts to be sexy. Instead, he concentrates on
describing the distress Diana feels as she and her friends are married and become the
"perfect" wives to their new husbands. The mind control is all pervasive. She
finds herself chattering away happily about shopping, or she cant help putting her
hand affectionately on her husbands thigh. Her memory of the man she was before
seems to have only one purpose: to humiliate and torture her. In this story, the guys
never come to grips with being womenwell, I wont say never, but I dont
want to spoil the endingand that is what makes it so wicked and so perversely sexy.
In the empty readers comment section of "Lady Jane," RJ has requested
that readers write to say whether they enjoyed the story or not and whether they would
like to see more like it. So far, no one has answered. But if you like the kind of stories
described in this review, then you should really check out RJs superior work. And if
youd like to see more such stories by this very talented writer of forced femme,
please take the time to say so!!!